This piece felt underwelming to me to begin with.
I'm not entirely sure why It didn't work, perhaps because so little of my body can be seen?could it have been too dark? something was falling flat and as for doing it live I found this might not work as the spot night illuminated the entire room, but the camera only pics up a spot as I did not want the entire room lit up filming this piece seems like the only option. This setting as changed the language of the piece. The barn piece is distant, filled with a sense of 'other'. Where this piece seems more intimate. Still other, but it feels as though there is more of a connection there.
Having said that I found that once I took the piece into the IT sweet and began adding the sound it really improved the film. Taking a sample of bees buzzing around a mic, I was inspired by the close aggressive bursts of sound you get when the creature flies right up against it. I edited this sound, brought the pitches down so I could hear the low vibrations through their wings instead of a high whispy buzz and added a reverb. I ended up with this an intense, loud rumble filled with movement. I edited the sound to seep in and out based on the amount of movement in the light source. It almost felt like painting controlling the wave of sound with the flow of the movements. This added a lot more movement and life to the piece. It almost sounds as though the bees are particles of dust distured by my cones movments though the air.